Contrary to what some people think, this is not good academic writing:<\/p>\n
The theory of [redacted] that have [sic] been presented in this paper [not that she actually, like, presented it ] could considered as plausible theoretical guesswork that could illuminate that presumed cognitive imaginative devices that led to the conceptualization of the initiatory experiences and their incorporation in the wider narrative life-story …. [it goes on].<\/p><\/blockquote>\n
That sentence fails the “Who did what?” test. It could be revised as “Blank’s theory does XXX because YYY.”<\/p>\n
But I think it deserves as Author’s Query to that effect, because I really cannot tell what the writer wishes to communicate here.<\/p>\n
There is a verb, however. Several, in fact. We have something to work with. But what should be the main verb?<\/p>\n
Glass of red wine time.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"
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